Good one bones

It's an improvement

I really like the right bottom now, has a foggy look, if you look to the left part you might discover the "vertical black/white bars". I would try right from the top left "head like form", to make the same sort of grey fogginess as in the bottom right corner. Now, if you think you like to add more colour you can think of using a dark blue ( transparant brush again, 80% or so) over the real dark area's, not everywhere, but here and there.
I really like what you did to the text, and logo, good transformation from static to dynamic

Also now the eye wants to explore more. Keep on going Bones